My school work-writing

October 28th, 2007

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At school we sometimes do a thing in writing called writers challenge. We have to write non-stop. This is what I wrote in tearm3:The gun sounded and I leapt from the starting line. I had made it to the finals!My heart pounded endlessly, not stopping once. ‘Go Jamie!’ I heard my friend call. The sound of the crowd was deafening, as my feet thumped on the soft grass.Sweat trickled down my forehead. I felt like a cheetah. I was halfway down the track; my hair blew back behind me, dancing in the wind like a kite. Wind rushed past my ears.My eyes watered; I looked like I was about to cry. Then my face turned bright red, like a giant cherry.I was almost to the finish line! Thoughts of joy and excitement rushed through my head … and then … my opponents rushed past me and finished.I had lost the race! My hopes were destroyed! 




One Response to “My school work-writing”

  1.   Louisa213 on November 14, 2007 2:47 pm

    Hello,

    I like your story. You used powerful words and described the scene well.
    By the way your blog sitte is even better than before.

    Louisa

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